>I don’t know about you, but the first paragraph hook was so helpful to me! I know so many of you have written me telling me the same thing … I’d love it if you could also go to Seekerville and tell the ladies the wonderful job they did 😉
What did you learn about your critique? I’d love to hear! For me, I learned (hey – is learnt a word???) the importance of tightening each sentence, making each word count.
Ok … I know you all wanna know who won and why she won. I think you’ll agree when you read her opening that her hook is fantastic. If you don’t want to read more after this hook then … well, I don’t think that will happen 🙂
Ok … the winner is … Georgia Downer 🙂
Here’s her hook and comments:
“Yes m’am, you heard correct. They’re here, just like I promised.”
So began one of the longest, hottest, learning experiences of my life.